Revision Practice Writing STAAR

Balloon Launch Read "Balloon Launch" and answer the questions that follow. 1. Nora would like to close the first paragraph (sentence 1-5) with a sentence that tells what the story is about? Which of the following should Nora add after sentence 5? For Jayden's birthday they had wanted to do something special. The balloons would fly effortlessly across the sky. Today Jayden and his dad would be passengers on one of the balloons! It was time for a birthday celebration! 2. What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13? Huge flames shot out of the burner inside the balloon, which was heating the air. Huge flames shot out of the burner because the air inside the balloon was heated. Huge flames shot out of the burner, the flames heated the air inside the balloon. Huge flames shot out of the burner, heating the air inside the balloon. 3. The transition from the third paragraph (sentence 9-15) to the fourth paragraph (sentences 16-18) is weak. Read both paragraphs again. Which sentence could BEST replace sentence 16 and improve the transition between these two paragraphs? Finally, it was time for the riders to climb inside the basket attached to the balloon. Even though it was time, the strong ropes kept the balloon from taking off. When it was finally time, Jayden and his father smiled. The time had come, but Jayden began to feel a slight twinge of fear that he hadn't expected. 4. Sentence 20 does not say what Nora intended it to say. How should she rewrite this sentence? With each blast from the air in the burner growing hotter, the balloon was allowed to fly higher and higher. With each blast from the burner, the air in the balloon grew hotter, allowed the balloon to fly higher and higher. With each blast from the burner, the balloon's air grew hotter, this allowed the balloon to fly higher and higher. With each blast from the burner, the balloon grew hotter, allowing the balloon to fly higher and higher in the air. 5. Nora wants to expand on the idea she has expressed in sentence 23. Which sentence could BEST follow sentence 23? The adventure of the day had only just began. As the balloon got higher in the air, things on the ground got smaller and smaller. Soon people were the size of ants, and cars and trucks looked like toys. Everything on the ground looked different when viewed from the air. 6. How should sentence 24 be revised? For more than an hour, Jayden, his father, and their fellow passengers floated high and floated away above the trees and the town. For more than an hour, Jayden, his father, and their fellow passengers floated high above the trees and the town, which was way high up. For more than an hour, Jayden, his father, and their fellow passengers floated they were high above the trees and the town. For more than an hour, Jayden, his father, and their fellow passengers floated high above the trees and the town. Investigating the Sneeze Read "Investigating the Sneeze" and answer the questions that follow. 7. In sentence 4, Quincy has attempted to provide a controlling idea for his paper. Which of the following could replace sentence 4 and more effectively state Quincy's controlling idea? Everyone has experienced the experience of sneezing, and there is so much that we can study and learn about this normal and common human activity. Although sneezing is an everyday human occurrence, it's also a remarkable function of the human body, and studies have revealed some rather interesting facts about it. In this paper, I would like to talk about sneezing what it is, why it happens, how common it is, and what some of the strangest facts about it can be. The strange, itchy sensation is over as the sneeze is released from your body, but the cause and purpose of the activity is an amazing kind of thing. 8. Quincy would like to add the following detail to the second paragraph (sentences 5-13).Where should this sentence be inserted? After sentence 6 After sentence 7 After sentence 9 After sentence 12 9. Quincy is not pleased with his introduction to the third paragraph (sentences 14-20). Which of the following can replace sentence 14 and serve as a more effective topic sentence for this paragraph? There are some accurate and false things that have been said about the sneeze being a normal human function. Sneezing is known to help protect health, but people don't sneeze when their body is actually sound asleep. Although it's true that a sneeze is hard to stop once it is on its way, not everything related to the sneeze is true. People have some interesting notions about the sneeze, and although some of these ideas are facts, others are myths. 10. Quincy would like to provide some additional support for the idea he has presented in sentence 19. Which of these ideas could best follow and support sentence 19? Doctors say this misconception may come from a slight change in blood pressure and blood flow during a sneeze, which may briefly change heart rhythm. This common myth, that a person's heart stops during a sneeze, is just a myth, which means that there is no truth to the idea at all. A myth is defined as a "widely held but false belief or idea," and the concept of the heart not beating during a sneeze is just that, a myth. Some people say that if you breathe through your mouth and pinch your nose when you feel a sneeze coming on, you can stop it. 11. What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 23? For example, the iguana sneezes more often and more efficiently than any other animal is what a WebMD article states. For example, a WebMD article states that the iguana sneezes more often and more efficiently than any other animal. For example, a WebMD article states this, the iguana sneezes more often and more efficiently than any other animal. No revision is needed in this sentence. 12. What is the most effective way to revise sentence 26? Donna Griffiths, who earned the Guinness World Record, had the longest sneezing fit in history when she was from Worcestershire, England. Donna Griffiths earned the Guinness World Record from Worcestershire, England, for the longest sneezing fit in history. Donna Griffiths was from Worcestershire, England, she earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history. Donna Griffiths, from Worcestershire, England, earned the Guinness World Record for the longest sneezing fit in history. 13. Quincy has not used the most effective word in sentence 30. To improve this sentence, he should changefeeling to - tug impression urge encounter